Averted Eyes

[gwyllion]

Title: Averted Eyes
Author: gwylliondream
Genre: canon
Pairing: Ennis/Jack
Rating: NC-17
Words: 100
Disclaimer: I did not create these characters. No disrespect intended. No profit desired, only muses.
Comments: Comments are welcome anytime, thanks so much for reading!



My ass hurts
I can’t speak
I look away
To study a blade of grass, the dirt, the sheep
I hurt
From riding today
From my unspoken, but demonstrated, desire last night
From the pressure
From the bleeding
My ass, my heart
From when you roughly took me in your drunken half-sleep
I lay low, like a dog at your feet
Awaiting retribution
Seeking approval
I promise our secret from everyone but you
My right hip supports me
My ass hurts
On this damp earth with gloved hands
Lying to you, “Me neither.”
When you tell me you’re not queer.

Comments

[skinheadbrian.livejournal.com]

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you've created a visible & believable scene, here.
very well done!
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[gwylliondream.livejournal.com]

This is one of my first tries at writing something poetic. Glad you liked it!

XO
Donna

This one I love

[bronctastic.livejournal.com]

Rings so true. All of it. You didn't miss it. Especially this...

I lay low, like a dog at your feet

Awaiting retribution

Seeking approval

Re: This one I love

[gwylliondream.livejournal.com]

Thanks so much for reading. Glad you liked it!

XO
Donna

[mazaher.livejournal.com]

"I lay low, like a dog at your feet": this is so true, it hurts like a stab. To my knowledge, nobody had ever pinned this down so beautifully. Thank you.

[gwylliondream.livejournal.com]

That was such a powerful scene due to Lee's masterful positioning of the actors' bodies. I guess I needed to say something about it.

Wow! I just noticed that I posted this only one month after I saw the movie.

Thanks for reading!

XO
Donna